On a bench not meant for time

She sat along the railroad track

On a bench not meant for time

In the distance the familiar chant

As the church bells all did chime

 

Though she had to leave

It’s now or never

 

She fended off unwanted looks

From creepy passers by

Then the blatant philanderers

Who gave it a quick try

 

Though she had to leave

It’s now or never

 

At last the train loomed into sight

She picked all her bags

Then kept them very close to her

As some were missing the name tags

 

Though she had to leave

It’s now or never

 

Once aboard, the steady rock

Soon brought to her some sleep

Though it was not a pleasant one

It was troublesome and deep

 

Though she had to leave

It’s now or never

 

The child within her belly

Slept more soundly than she did

For weeks she battled painfully

To keep its presence hid

 

Though she had to leave

It’s now or never

 

So now she had to leave this place

Then make a home for two

Away from all the gossipers

The people she once knew

 




Comments:
 
JMariah   JMariah wrote
on 5/22/2011 4:31:07 PM
Very well done. Very good development of the story. The only weakness I saw was the use of the word "though" in your couplets. It implies that the two facts to follow will be opposite in nature, when in fact they aren't in your poem. I hope I haven't confused you. I really do like the style of this poem.

markBrad   markBrad wrote
on 2/8/2011 2:10:50 PM
Thank You!

OneVoice   OneVoice wrote
on 2/7/2011 6:13:57 PM
...beautifully done - well written and constructed!!!

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